Re: Max and Ruby-steven

[Teacher Winget]

The title titlebof of this book is "A Pajama Party."

One day, Ruby prepared a pajama party.
Ruby was baking cookies for her friends.
Max wanted to join the pajama party, but Ruby didn't invite him.
When Ruby and Max made some noise, Ruby's friend came. were making noise, Ruby’s friends arrived.

Then they went to Ruby's Rome room.
First, they played a fashion show. Max wanted to play with them.
So, Max were wore pajamas and went to Ruby's Rome room.

But Ruby said, "You can't play with us, Max, because you're a boy."

Then Ruby and her friends prepared the second play.
They played makeup. While Tuby and her friend were playing. Ruby and her friends were playing, Max made up put on makeup too, but when Max went to Ruby's Rome,they finished the play. room, they were already finished.

Last, they have some dance party. Lastly, they had a dance party.
Max danced with toys, and Ruby's friends liked them, so they danced with Max.

When Ruby took some cookies, her friends slept, so Max ate cookies. had fallen asleep, so Max ate the cookies. 

I think this story is funny, and I think Max is so smart but also very playful.

Score: B

Tips)

1. 문법: "were pajamas" 대신 "wore pajamas," "Rome" 대신 "room," "slept" 대신 "had fallen asleep"라고 해야 자연스럽습니다.
2. 내용 추가: Max가 춤을 추거나 친구들과 상호작용하는 동안 어떤 감정을 느꼈는지 더 자세히 묘사하면 글이 더욱 흥미로워질 것입니다!