Re: Max and Ruby (Alexander)

[Teacher Winget]

Valerie and Louise will come over came over for a pajama party.
Ruby will make a wonderful time. wanted to make it a wonderful time.
Ruby put out her jewelry and dance records, and Ruby borrowed borrowed fashion magazines from Grandma.
And of course, Ruby made snacks.

Valerie and Louise were coming at the Ruby's home. came to Ruby's home.
They weared wore pajamas.
Max wanted to join the pajama party, but they refused for Max.~ they said no.

So, Max weared wore pajamas.
They read fashion magazines and did makeup.
Max wanted to join the pajama party, but They refused for Max. they refused him again.

Max did makeup. put on makeup too.
They danced. Max wanted to join the pajama party.

Max danced with duck toys.
Finally, Max stayed with them. was allowed to stay with them.
Max played together with them.

While Ruby brang snacks, brought snacks, Valerie and Louise slept. had fallen asleep.
Max ate the snacks.

Score: A-

Tips)

1. 문법: "weared" 대신 "wore," "brang" 대신 "brought"이라고 해야 자연스럽습니다.
2. 내용 추가: Max가 친구들과 함께할 수 있어서 느낀 기쁨이나 Ruby가 어떻게 반응했는지를 추가하면 글이 더 풍부해질 것입니다!