영어 자기소개서입니다.

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안녕하세요. 장문이라 읽다가 짜증나실꺼예요; 게다가 혼자 작성한 것이라서 문법이나 내용적인 측면도 이상할꺼예요

도와주실 분들의 편의를 위해 간단한 제 소개를 하면

계리사를 목표로 외국계기업을 가고 싶습니다ㅎ

어휘나 문법쪽을 봐주셔도 되고 내용을 어떻게 바꿨으면 좋겠다 등 많은 충고 감사히 여기겠습니다~

Dear Sir.

“It’s not important what you do. But if you have anything that you are crazy about, you are a happy person, already.”, Park Kal-Lin who was a choir director of KBS broadcasting ‘The qualification of man’ said.

I was happy.

I know that music gives us impressive by harmony. In my middle and high school, I played the traditional instruments with my colleagues. And in my university, I played an electronic guitar in a band. I held many performances for many people. For only one show, everyday I practiced the instruments. The clapping that was in the performances is a memory that I have.

I am happy.

To be a best actuary in the world, I will do my best. For that, I am preparing ASA.

And I know I am a beginner in English, because of my belated studies; my major and an Actuary of Korea.

Because I know my weakness, I will work an improvement impassionedly.

My acquaintances say, “If you are fascinated by anything, you are stuck on that.”. That is, I do anything to the aim with my affection.

Addition to my affection for my tasks, my meticulous and delicate personalities are suitable for an actuary part. In the army, I took on a soldier that manages secret documents in the operation division. When there was a related censorship in our regiment, we received a faultless result.

And through the music activities, I learned how to create the harmony by the different person. In this way, I can create one sound in the company, too.

 The company wants the applicant who has many experiences in this field. I know that I have less that than others in this. Only I don’t have some experience in the insurance, I have special experience than others in the life. For example, a member in a band, trips by bicycle and boxing.

 I want you to give me the opportunity that I can experience it.

 I am ready to work under pressure by making 100% commitment to this prime opportunity. I strongly believe that the company and I could be an ideal partner. I appreciate your consideration and look forward to hearing from you.

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정말 감사해요~ 내용적인 면이 전부 이상했군요; 영어 문법보다 내용이 포인트가 안 맞는다는 충고 감사합니다^^

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I have a suggestion that you should read a book or something else about cover letter. the structure of cover letter is really important. If you just send cover letter like that, they will not read it. as you konw, it's for foreing company and it's so different to make a cover letter compared to korean company. but Don't worried about that, there is a way to make structure and what you write in it. you should know that

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ㅎ역시 전체적인 구조가 이상하군요... 전체적으로 수정하겠습니다;; 너무 감사합니다~

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Most of universities offer information about cover letter that i said online or offline.

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헛 짧은 한 마디이지만 무슨 말씀이신지....... 아무튼 답변 감사합니다^^