Max and Ruby Hide and Seek// Albert

[Student]

  The title of this story is Max and Ruby Hide and Seek.
Ruby wants to play Hide and seek with Max.
But he didn't know how to play Hide and seek.
So she teach the rule to Max.
  So they start play Hide and seek.
Max wants to hide so he hide frist.

He hide behind the pot.

First Ruby can't find the Max.

But soon she find the Max.

  Then he wants to hide again.

So Ruby teach again to play hide and seek.

But he ran away, so she start again to find Max.

Max hide in the closet, soon she find.

But he rans away again.

So she find the Max and, stop playing the game.

I think the Max is very cute and funny🐰🐰

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this story is "Max and Ruby Hide and Seek."

Ruby wants to play Hide and seek with Max. But he didn't know (how to play Hide and seek.) how to play hide and seek. So she teach (the rule) him the rules to Max.

So they start (play Hide and seek.) to play hide and seek. Max wants to hide so he (hide) hides (frist.) first.

He hides behind (the pot.) a pot.

(Ruby can't find the Max.) At first, Ruby can't find Max.

But soon she (find) finds (the) Max.

[Teacher Winget]

Then he wants to hide again. So Ruby (teach) teaches (again to play hide and seek.) again how to play hide and seek.

But he (ran away,) runs away, so she (start again to find Max.) starts again to find Max.

Max (hide) hides in the closet, (soon) and soon she (find.) finds him.

But he (rans) runs away again.

So she (find the Max and, stop playing the game.) finds Max and stops playing the game.

I think (the Max is very cute and funny.) Max is very cute and funny.

[Teacher1]

Teacher's comments
Good job!! But you could write longer sentences.