Re: Caillou Goes to a Theme Park - 이하연

[Teacher1]

The title of the video is “Caillou Goes to a Theme Park.”

Caillou’s family arrived at the theme park.

Caillou was very excited. Caillou and his daddy ride called the Nigara Falls River Caillou and his daddy went on a ride called the Niagara Falls River. Caillou thought it was fun but a little scary.

Caillou’s family ate desserts.

Caillou wanted a big teddy bear, so he played a game, but the game was difficult. However, his daddy was good at the game.

When Caillou’s mom asked him what he enjoyed the most, he replied that he enjoyed getting the doll the most.

The video was very interesting.

Score: A-

Tips)

1. "Nigara Falls River"는 "Niagara Falls River"로 고쳐야 해요.
   (Correct "Nigara Falls River" to "Niagara Falls River.")
2. "ride called the"는 "went on a ride called the"로 고쳐 문장을 자연스럽게 만들어 보세요.
   (Change "ride called the" to "went on a ride called the" for smoother phrasing.)
3. Caillou가 게임을 하며 느꼈던 감정이나 그 과정에 대해 조금 더 자세히 써보면 이야기가 풍성해져요.
   (Add more detail about how Caillou felt during the game to make the story richer.)
4. 가족과 함께한 놀이공원의 즐거움을 조금 더 표현하면 이야기가 따뜻하게 느껴질 거예요.
   (Express more of the joy of spending time at the theme park with his family for a warmer story.)