Re: Caillou goes to the park Theme park-Jackson

[Teacher Winget]

"Let's see what Caillou did today."

"Today's story is called 'Caillou Goes to a Theme Park.'"

"Caillou was very excited because this was the first time he'd ever been to a theme park, and he wanted to go on the rides with his daddy."

"Daddy, Daddy, look! it was biggest teddy bear It’s the biggest teddy bear!"

"Caillou really really hoped really hoped his daddy could make the third hoop fall over the block land on the block."

"What was the best part, was it do you think?"

"I know! it was daddy throwing the hoops and winning the bear wasn't it It was Daddy throwing the hoops and winning the bear, wasn’t it?"

"Yes!"

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Score: A-

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Tips):

1. 문법과 표현:

   • "it was biggest teddy bear" → "It’s the biggest teddy bear"
   • "really really hoped" → "really hoped" (반복된 단어 삭제)
   • "fall over the block" → "land on the block"

2. 내용 추가하기:

   • 테디베어를 받은 Caillou의 반응과 가족의 기쁨을 더 구체적으로 묘사해 보세요.
   • 테마파크에서 다른 재미있는 활동을 추가해 이야기를 풍부하게 만들 수 있습니다.

3. 문장 연결:

   • 대화 사이의 전환을 자연스럽게 연결하려면 "Then," "Afterward," 같은 연결어를 추가해 보세요.