Re: 김동휘 caillou 주말 과제

[Teacher1]

Today's story is "Caillou Goes to a Theme Park."

Caillou went to a theme park.

Caillou rode on a Hurricane ride and ate some cotton candy.

Then, Caillou rode on a Ferris wheel. Caillou liked riding the Ferris wheel.

Caillou threw a ring to try and get a teddy bear, but it was difficult. However, his daddy succeeded.

After that, Caillou went home.

Score: B

Tips)

1. "hurrum ride"는 문맥상 "Hurricane ride"로 수정하면 좋습니다.
   (Replace "hurrum ride" with "Hurricane ride" for clarity.)
2. "Caillou ride on"은 과거형인 "Caillou rode on"으로 고쳐야 해요.
   (Correct "Caillou ride on" to "Caillou rode on" for past tense consistency.)
3. "tardy bear"는 "teddy bear"로 수정해야 정확합니다.
   (Change "tardy bear" to "teddy bear.")
4. 이야기를 더 풍부하게 하려면, Caillou가 놀이기구를 탈 때 느낀 기분이나 아빠가 성공했을 때의 순간을 추가해 보세요.
   (Add details about how Caillou felt on the rides or when his dad succeeded to make the story more engaging.)