[Corrected] korea worse off

[Jim Lee]

Your writing	My corrections
Suddenly, the weather had changed and was raining during study in a labroary. Though winter is comming, it's usually still warm in busan. Looking up the sky, faceing the rain I wanted some drink, Soju but it was just 4:30 pm. No one wanted to go have a drink with me, fish. So sad I needed it~~~~~~ I couldn't keep studying any more, and directly came home. Today is really gloomy. A tv programme showed that Korean economy has been still decreasing, youth unemployment rate has been increasing. The strike on Hanjin and the two companis, all three leaders of the labor union darely tried to do sucide before. Althought I want to write about dark situation more, i should stop it. No matter how hard making a live, let's keep trying.	Suddenly, the weather had changed and was raining while I was during studying in a laboratoryoary. Though winter is comming, it's usually still warm in Bbusan at this time of the season. Looking up to the sky, faceing the rain, I wanted to some drink, Soju but it was onlyjust 4:30 pm. No one wanted to go and have a drink with me, fish. So sad that I needed it~~~~~~ I couldn't keep studying any more so, and directly I came home directly. Today is a really gloomy day. A tv programme showed that the Korean economy is has been still decreasing and, youth unemployment rate has been increasing. The strike ofn Hanjin and the two other companies resulted in, all three leaders of the labor union darely tryingied to committdo suicide before. Althought I want to write more about the dark situation more, Ii should stop nowit. No matter how hard it is to makeing a livinge, we must continue to trylet's keep trying.
Comment: Great writing!  Your thought process is very easy to follow.  Take a good look at my corrections and see if you can do better next time. Personal comment: I can understand that the economy of Korea at the moment is very tough. However, at times like this, you must keep your chin up and work harder than others.  I am sure things will be brighter in the future.  Good luck! J