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<td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> <p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Today,
I donated my blood in 노량진. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Whenever
I donate blood, I feel in anxiety. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>A
few years ago, when I donated my blood in an army, the nurse poorly
injected the needle into my muscle. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>So
I told her about feeling it strange. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>The
nurse put it out on the way and injected it again. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>After
that, whenever I donate my blood, the thing still comes up in my head.
</span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Anyway,
I was surprised by nice facilities in the house of blood donation. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Each
bed has the notebook in order to enjoy the Internet during donating
blood. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>So
I wasn't bored during that time. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>And
I ate the Choco Pie, some Juice, some candy and they gave me one umbrella.
</span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Fortunately,
the rain had been pouring outside and I didn't have the umbrella. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>I
gave my friend a certificate of my blood donation because his relative
took a leukemia. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>I
wish to be a help to him. </span></p></td>
<td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> <p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Today,
I donated my blood in 노량진. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Whenever
I donate blood, I feel </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;
'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:34">a bit anxious </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:34">in anxiety.</del></span>
</span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>A
few years ago, when I donated my blood in </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;
color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:35">the </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:35">an</del></span> army, the
nurse poorly injected the needle into my muscle. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>So
I told her </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:41">that it felt </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">about feeling it</del></span>
strange. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>The
nurse </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">took it out </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">put it out on the way</del></span>
and injected it again. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>After
that, whenever I donate my blood, the </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;
color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">situation </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">thing still</del></span>
comes </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">to my mind </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">up in my head. </del></span><span
class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:42"></del></span></span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Anyway,
I was surprised by </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;
'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:42">the </ins></span></span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black'>nice facilities in the house of blood donation. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>Each
bed has </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">a </ins></span></span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">the </del></span>notebook in order </span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span
class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">for the
donors </ins></span></span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>to
enjoy the Internet </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">while </ins></span></span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">during</del></span> donating blood. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>So
I wasn't bored during that time. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>And
I ate <span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">the</del></span> Choco Pie, some Juice, some candy
and they </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">also </ins></span></span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black'>gave me one umbrella. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;
'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">I was lucky because </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:43">Fortunately, the </del></span>rain
had been pouring outside and I didn't have </span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">an </ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">the </del></span>umbrella.
</span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>I
gave my friend </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">the </ins></span></span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">a</del></span> certificate of my blood donation
because his relative </span><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black;
'><span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">has </ins></span></span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black'><span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">took a </del></span>leukemia. </span></p>
<p style='text-align:justify;text-justify:
inter-ideograph;line-height:14.25pt'><span style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'>I
wish to be <span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">a</del></span> help</span><span style='font-size:
9.0pt;color:black;'><span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2005-08-21T23:44">ful</ins></span></span><span
style='font-size:9.0pt;color:black'> to him. </span></p></td>
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<p><span style='font-size:10.0pt; font-family:Arial'>Excellent work….You
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