Re: Max and ruby jinwoong

[Teacher1]

The title of this story is Surprise Ruby.

This story begins in the room.

Ruby wears a dress and a crown.

After watching the scene, Max goes outside and flies around holding Ruby's crown with a helicopter toy.

In front of Ruby, who was holding the crown, there was a cake made of dirt.

Max kept disappearing, and Ruby kept looking for him.

When Ruby came home, her friends welcomed her, and the story ended.

Score: B-

Tips)

1. "In front of Ruby, who held the crown" → "In front of Ruby, who was holding the crown"
   👉 과거 진행형을 사용하면 더 자연스러워요!
2. "a cake made of earth" → "a cake made of dirt"
   👉 "earth"는 지구나 흙 전체를 의미하고, "dirt"가 더 자연스러운 표현이에요!
3. "Max kept disappearing and Ruby kept looking" → "Max kept disappearing, and Ruby kept looking for him"
   👉 "look"만 쓰면 "보다"라는 뜻이므로, "look for"를 사용해야 해요!
4. "When Ruby comes home" → "When Ruby came home"
   👉 과거 이야기이므로 "comes" 대신 "came"을 써야 해요!
5. "and the story end" → "and the story ended"
   👉 과거형 "ended"를 사용해야 해요!