Re: Max and Ruby - Jia

[Teacher1]

Ep.1 Ruby's Safari

Ruby and Louise had to take a picture of special living things to fill out the last page of their scrapbook.

Today was the day the Bunny Scout leader come came to check it, but they had forgotten.

They were urgent in a hurry, and Max didn’t follow them. Instead, he kept interrupting.

Ruby and Louise took a picture something took pictures of something, but it was all Max’s toys.

For example, there was a parrot, tarantula, ladybug, and red elephant.

However, Max’s red elephant toy attracted a hummingbird, which was exactly what they needed.

Finally, the leader checked their scrapt book scrapbook, and they got a badge and praise.

I think they like repeating things.

Score: A-

Tips)

1. "bunnyscout leader come"는 "Bunny Scout leader came"으로 수정하여 시제와 대문자 규칙을 맞췄습니다.
   (Changed "bunnyscout leader come" to "Bunny Scout leader came" for proper tense and capitalization.)
2. "They are urgent"는 "They were in a hurry"로 자연스럽게 수정했습니다.
   (Revised "They are urgent" to "They were in a hurry.")
3. "took a picture something"는 "took pictures of something"으로 수정해 문법을 맞췄습니다.
   (Corrected "took a picture something" to "took pictures of something.")
4. "scrapt book"는 "scrapbook"으로 철자를 수정했습니다.
   (Fixed the typo "scrapt book" to "scrapbook.")
5. Max가 방해했을 때 Ruby와 Louise의 반응을 조금 더 묘사하면 이야기가 더 생동감 있어질 수 있습니다.
   (Adding more detail about Ruby and Louise’s reactions to Max’s interruptions could make the story more engaging