유형1. 예시 essay 주제.
최근 SNS 열풍이 거세디. 시간과 공간을 초월한 사람들과의 관계 맺음을 통해서 삶의 의미를 새롭게 하는가 하면, 인간의 삶 자체 또한 거대한 네트워크로 진화하고 있다. 스마트 폰 중독현상, 생산력 없는 관계망의 확산 등 비판적인 목소리도 있지만, 스마트혁명으로 부르는 기술진화에 힘입어 이제는 SNS는 개인의 사회화에 대한 새로운 접근과 인프라를 제공하고 있다.
Over the past a
few years, it has been generally argued on whether or not development of SNS,
Social Network Services, is beneficial or not to our society. Some people might
insist that SNS is beneficial in terms of providing us accessibility with other
friends all over the world. It also saves time and money since its network is
internet-based; nevertheless, other people might disagree with it because they
consider smart-phone addiction and the spread of unproductive relationships.
However, I am convinced that SNS gives more benefits than its losses. Actually,
I have some reasons to support my idea which I will develop and explain as
specifically as I can in the next following paragraphs: connecting people
within seconds, idea resource and
To begin with,
Social Network Service provides us connection with other people within a short
time. Through the network, North American users are able to communicate with
users in Asia immediately and share their daily lives and status anytime in
anywhere they wish. SNS also provides users with other users’ information not only in texts but also
in images, sounds and even videos. Some people might argue that such technology
is not beneficial for our society because harmful media can also spread hastily
and such information can result panic to the whole world. However, it is not a
hard thing to figure out that the spread of threatening information are only a
portion of what users post on their status. Very often, they try to gather hope
and support to help others. To give some of the cases for examples of this,
Hyun Dai, a car producing company in South Korea, has conducted a ‘comment and help’ event in order to help an
old lady possess a car. In another case, one of the largest SNS, Twitter, saved
many lives by their users posting information of upcoming thunderstorm that
informed the Meteorological Administration.
To continue with,
SNS can be utilized as a mean to connect consumers with producers. Currently,
many companies are making full use of the accessibility that SNS provides. They
often post pictures of 4~5 models of their developing product and show it to
the crowd to see what they think about it. This process is called ‘Crowd
Sourcing’. The reason behind this unique way of marketing is its cost efficiency
and time efficiency. Yet, some people might argue that there are number of fake
companies that advertise false information that may cheat on consumers.
Nevertheless, it is not very difficult to find out that such advertisers get
caught in a short time due to on-line polices and such fake information is easy
to notice. To give one of my personal experiences as an example of this, I have
purchased a fan that is advertised to produce cool air. It was an extremely hot
weather that year which made my decision concrete. After purchasing it, my
whole habits changed. Thanks to the fan, I could get a good night sleep and the
time I spent on waking my-self up, getting shower several times because of
sweating and changing clothes because it would smell bad. It is not only me who
benefited from a service of SNS, other friends, family even the SNS itself and
the advertisers all took profit.
As a conclusion,
SNS is a gigantic network of people and groups. This network has both pros and
cons, however, I think that negative impacts are outweighed by positive impacts
such as providing the quickest connection and being a source of idea.
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