Re: Max and Ruby--------- Albert

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this story is "Camp Out."

The weather was too hot, so Max and Ruby decided to go camp out camp outside.

But Max didn't want to sleep in a tent.

He want wanted to sleep in just outside.

So Ruby dried up tried to convince Max.

But the tent was empty, so until Ruby finish making finished setting up the tent, Max will would find the frashlight flashlight.

After a while, Max find found the flashlight, and he also find found his snake toy.

But he still wanted to sleep outside.

Then Ruby give gave him another errand.

The errand was to find the sleeping bag and radio.

So he find found the sleeping bag, radio, and his books too.

But he still wanted to sleep outside.

So Ruby give gave him another errand.

The errand was to find the pillow.

So he find found the pillow and took plenty of his toys.

Then Max had an idea.

Max push pushed his toys and books into the tent.

Soon the tent was compacted.

Then he sleep slept outside.

I think Max had a fantastic idea.

Grade: B

Tips:

1. Use the correct verb tenses (wanted instead of want, found instead of find).
2. Correct spelling errors (flashlight instead of frashlight).
3. Make sure all sentences are clear and grammatically correct.