Re:TJ's writing : Assuming that people are healthy, Do you think too much attention is placed on how they look?

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Assuming that people are healthy, do you think too much attention is placed

on how they look?

If you ask me, although health is one of the main reasons why people give

attention to their bodies, there would be still much attention which is placed 

on how they look regardless whether they're healthy or not. Because they are

affected more by recognition of others than what they truely are, the desire

                                                                                       truly

 to get slim and muscular would be everlasting for us. Actually, there is no 

 of getting slim and having muscular body

no specific standard to determine which people are completely healthy or not,

so it is an uncertain concept and even more kind of relative one. For these

reasons, people would still worry about how they look even though they are

healthy. If someone recognizes that he/she is more fat than others, they would

                                                                       more fatter                                                       

think that I'm still not good looking, and then they will keep up

                they’re still not

with losing weight.

in losing more weight.

Comments

Hello there!

Well, good job! Only few corrections I did in this entry. This one is a good answer

about the physical appearances of individuals and how it affects in their daily life

everyday. I tried to imagine how far you can write many things about for upcoming

writing/entry. More ideas to come! J