Let's Go Out and Play
The main character is Danny. One day, it was snowing, and Danny wanted to play outside. However, his mother said him → told him he can't → couldn't go out until he putted → put on his snowsuit, boots, scarf, and mittens.
Danny disagreed to wear → refused to wear them. He asked his mother, "Why do I have to wear all these clothes when animals don’t?" His mother explained that some animals, like dogs, horses, cows, and rabbits, grow thick coats of hair to stay water → warm during the winter. She added that if he grew hair like those animals, he would look very strange!
Danny stayed inside and llok → looked at his picture books, still thinking about the animals. Then, he asked his mother, "What do → did other animals do during winter?" She told him that bears are eating → eat a lot in the summer to get fat and sleep through the winter. Most birds fly away to warmer places, and ants crawl into the ground to stay warm.
After hearing all this, Danny changed his mind. He putted → put on his snowsuit, boots, scarf, and mittens, and went outside to play with his dog, Shep, before the snow stopped. Danny was happy that he wasn’t like the animals. He wanted to enjoy playing in the snow, just like any other kid.
Score: B+
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어휘 선택
"엄마가 나갈 수 없다고 말했다"는 said him보다는 told him이 더 자연스러워요.
시제 일관성
과거 이야기를 할 때, 현재형 대신 couldn't 같은 과거형을 사용해야 해요.
동물들의 행동 설명
다른 동물들의 행동을 설명할 때, are eating 대신 eat와 같은 시제를 통일해서 사용해 주세요.