Re: Max and Ruby-Sofia Oh

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this cartoon is "Perfect Pumpkin."

Max and Ruby went store to the store to pick the perfect pumpkin.

There are were many pumpkins to choose . from.

When Ruby picked a pumpkin, Max tried to eat candy.

Ruby saw him and stopped . him, but the pumpkin was gone.

Ruby choose chose the pumpkin and mr. huffington Mr. Huffington took it.

Max break down knocked down the cans.

While they pile it were piling them, the pumpkins pumpkin was gone.

When she was sad, he broke Ruby was sad, Max broke the decoration.

Actually, there was perfect pumpkin was a perfect pumpkin . inside!

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Score: B+

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Tips):

1. • "went store" → "went to the store" (전치사 필요)
   • "There are" → "There were" (과거 시제 일치)
   • "choose" → "choose from" (표현 완성)
   • "choose" → "chose" (과거형)
   • "mr. huffington" → "Mr. Huffington" (대문자와 이름 표기법 수정)
   • "break down" → "knocked down" (더 자연스러운 표현)
   • "pile it" → "were piling them" (문법 수정 및 복수형 일치)
   • "pumpkins" → "pumpkin" (단수형 일치)
   • "was perfect pumpkin" → "was a perfect pumpkin" (문장 완성 및 관사 추가)
2. • Max가 장난을 친 이유나 Ruby의 감정을 추가하면 이야기가 더 풍부해집니다.
   • 마지막 장면에서 Max가 어떻게 도와줬는지 설명하면 더 재미있을 것입니다.