Re: 1B61-kyle

[Teacher3]

"The Rat Cather Catcher of Hamelim Hamelin."

The little German town of Hamelin had a big, disgusting problem. There were rats everywhere. One day**,** a stranger came to town. "I'm the best reat rat catcher came to town!" He he announced. He would fix the rat problem for a price. The mayor agreed, and the stranger pulled out a small flute. He walked through the streets. One by one, the rats started to follow him and he led them to the river**;** the rats swam away from the town. They were greedy. They didn't pay to him. The man was angry and promised to take revenge. All the children in the town began to follow him. He took them away form from their parents and into the mountains. The people were so upset**,** they paid the man everything they owned. The children returned and there was never another rat in Hamelin.

Score: B

Tips)

1. 철자를 정확하게 써주세요! ('Catcher', 'Hamelin', 'from'이 맞아요)
2. 대화를 쓸 때는 따옴표 안의 첫 글자를 대문자로 써요! ("I'm"처럼 써요)
3. 사람들은 왜 처음 약속을 지키지 않았나요? (이유를 설명해보세요)
4. 아이들은 어떻게 돌아왔나요? (자세히 써보면 좋겠어요)
5. 피리 부는 사람은 어디로 갔나요? (결말을 더 써보세요)