The title of this book is ''Virtual Tourism.''
Virtual Torism Tourism can let you travel everywhere from home because this is not reality.
Although we cannot go to Mars end so on planets or other planets in real life, this machine can let you travel planet virtually.
This is called one of part of AI technology. Also, this machine is free of charge to travel anywhere. And it seems easy, but this is not easy to use.
I think Virtual Torism Tourism is a little dangerous because this activity can let you browse and get up close to things, which might cause problems. But, I want to try that, and I want to play on several maps, and go to Mars using my imagination.
Thank you.
Score: B+
Tips:
- 'Torism'는 'Tourism'으로 고쳐야 해요.
- 'end so on planets' 대신 'or other planets'로 바꾸면 더 자연스럽게 들려요.
- 'This machine is free of charge' 표현에서 'is'를 빼고 'it’s'로 바꾸는 게 맞아요.
- 문장 연결이 조금 더 매끄럽게 이어지도록 문장 구조를 다듬었어요.
- 추가 팁: 가상 관광의 장단점을 다루고 있어요. 좀 더 구체적인 예를 들어보면 좋을 것 같아요, 예를 들어 어떤 장소를 가상으로 여행하고 싶은지, 어떤 행성이 가장 기대되는지 등을 추가해보세요.