Re: 이현구ㅗㄴ

[Teacher1]

Today is Ruby's birthday.

When Ruby put on her tiara, Max stole her tiara.

But it was Max’s surprise with a mud cake, and Ruby liked it.

Max stole her tiara again, so Ruby followed him.

In the process, they imitated a frog.

When they came back to the house, Ruby realized that it was all a surprise from her friends, Max, and Grandmother.

Score: B-

Tips)

1. "When Ruby dressed up tiara" → "When Ruby put on her tiara"
   👉 "dress up"은 옷을 입을 때 쓰이고, "put on"이 더 적절한 표현이에요!
2. "But it is Max’s suprise" → "But it was Max’s surprise"
   👉 과거 이야기이므로 "is" 대신 "was"를 사용해야 해요. 그리고 "suprise"는 철자 오류로, "surprise"가 맞아요!
3. "Max stole her tiara again so ruby followed him in the process they imitated frog" → "Max stole her tiara again, so Ruby followed him. In the process, they imitated a frog."
   👉 문장을 나누고, "a frog"처럼 관사를 추가해 더 자연스럽게 수정했어요!
4. "When they came back the house" → "When they came back to the house"
   👉 "came back" 뒤에는 "to"가 필요해요!
5. "Ruby knew that it is all suprise with friends and max and grandmother" → "Ruby realized that it was all a surprise from her friends, Max, and Grandmother."
   👉 "knew"보다 "realized"가 더 적절하고, "is" 대신 "was"를 사용해야 해요. 그리고 "surprise with" 대신 "a surprise from"이 맞아요!