Re: 임채윤

[Teacher1]

Surprise Ruby

The title of this story is "Surprise Ruby."

The main characters are Ruby and Max.

When it was Ruby’s birthday, Max took off Ruby’s jewelry.

And he ran away from Ruby again and again.

And they played a frog jumping game.

Their destination was Grandma’s house.

When Max and Ruby reached there, everyone surprised Ruby.

Score: B-

Tips)

1. "When Ruby’s birthday" → "When it was Ruby’s birthday"
   👉 "Ruby’s birthday"만 쓰면 문장이 완전하지 않아요. "it was"를 추가해야 해요!
2. "Max take off Ruby’s jewelries." → "Max took off Ruby’s jewelry."
   👉 과거 시제이므로 "take" 대신 "took"을 써야 하고, "jewelry"는 셀 수 없는 명사라 복수형 "jewelries"가 틀려요!
3. "And he ran by Ruby again and again." → "And he ran away from Ruby again and again."
   👉 "ran by"는 자연스럽지 않고, "ran away from"이 더 적절해요!
4. "And they played frog jumping." → "And they played a frog jumping game."
   👉 "frog jumping"만 쓰면 의미가 애매하므로 "a frog jumping game"으로 수정했어요!
5. "When Max and Ruby reach there" → "When Max and Ruby reached there"
   👉 과거 이야기이므로 "reached"로 수정해야 해요!
6. "Everyone surprised Ruby." → "Everyone gave Ruby a surprise."
   👉 "Everyone surprised Ruby"는 어색할 수 있어요. "gave Ruby a surprise"가 더 자연스러워요!