Re: Max and Ruby Sofia Jo

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this story is "Grandma’s Berry Patch."

Oneday One day, Max and Ruby find found a Berry berry and ate it.

So they think thought about Grandma, and they collected Berry berries.

and find They also found a BlueBerry blueberry and collected it that too. But Max always ate it them, so Ruby ate collected it some too.

She ready prepared for Max’s toy, so Max played it with it and collected helped collect berries.

l I think this story is so fun was really fun!

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Score: B+

Tips (수정 및 추가 내용)

1. 문법 및 표현 수정:
   • "Oneday" → "One day" (띄어쓰기 필요)
   • "find" → "found" (과거형 사용 필요)
   • "Berry" → "berry" (일반 명사는 소문자로 시작)
   • "think" → "thought" (과거형 유지)
   • "find" → "found" (과거형 유지)
   • "BlueBerry" → "blueberry" (일반 명사는 소문자)
   • "it" → "them" (berries는 복수형이므로 them이 맞음)
   • "ate" → "collected" (맥락상 Ruby도 먹은 게 아니라, Max를 도와 열매를 모은 것으로 수정)
   • "ready for" → "prepared" ('준비하다'는 'prepared'가 더 자연스러움)
   • "collected it too" → "helped collect berries" (좀 더 자연스럽게 정리)
   • "l" → "I" (대문자로 수정)
   • "is so fun" → "was really fun!" ('fun'을 형용사로 사용할 때 'really fun'이 더 자연스러움)