Re: Writing summary 1C 55 (Ruby)

[Sub tutor 1]

The city was filled with cars. Cars were parked in buildings s 5 kilometer high. And no body nobody could breathe well because of the smog.

The mayor of the city called a wizard to remove the smog.
"I can do it, but you must stop driving your cars so much."
The wizard started to suck suck up all the smog at on the tallest building.
The people were can could breathe again.
But people too much driving people drove too much and loved their cars.
The smog come came back.
The wizard came back and asked, "Why "Why didn't you stop driving your cars?"
"We love our cars too much," He answered he answered.
The wizard left and got into a giant car.
He started to honk honk his horn, making music.
All the cars followed him and disappeared forever.
The air became fresh again.

Score: A-

Tips)

• 과거 이야기에는 동사를 과거형으로 써요. (come → came, drive → drove)

• 문장 안에서 주어 + 동사 순서를 지켜요. (people drove too much)

• 숫자는 숫자(5) 로 쓰면 더 좋아요.

• 마지막에 도시 사람들이 무엇을 배웠는지 한 문장 더 쓰면 이야기가 더 멋져요.