Re: Read it unit-5(Grace)

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The title of this book is "The Three Gifts." Did you know this content. Did you know about this story?

I learned about this story today. However, there are mant stories in several traditional book many stories in several traditional books. In this book, three son sons wanted to rich and they save the money to Nobody can't steal it. become rich, so they saved their money where nobody could steal it. So, they had many other characters and who see them can't notice. They used disguises so others couldn’t recognize them. Conclusion, they can save the treasures and money. In the end, they managed to save their treasures and money.

I think in this story, if I were them, I wouldn’t be able to save my money and treasures. So, I think they look like hero are like heroes.👿

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Score: B-

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1. 문장 질문 형식 수정: “Did you know this content”은 부자연스러우므로, **“Did you know about this story?”**처럼 문장을 질문 형태로 자연스럽게 수정하면 좋습니다.

2. 철자 및 문법: “mant”는 오타이며, **“many”**로 수정해야 합니다.

3. 단수와 복수형 사용: “three son”은 복수형 **“three sons”**로 수정해야 해요.

4. 명확한 문장 표현: “they save the money to Nobody can't steal it”는 의미가 불분명해요. **“they saved their money where nobody could steal it”**로 표현해 내용을 명확히 전달해 보세요.

5. 시제 일관성: “can”은 현재 시제이므로 **“could”**로 수정하여 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하는 것이 좋습니다.

6. 결론 문장 명확화: "Conclusion, they can save the treasures and money"는 "In the end, they managed to save their treasures and money"처럼 더 명확한 표현을 사용해 보세요.

7. 가정 표현에서의 일관성: 마지막 문장에서 가정법을 사용할 때는 **“if I were them, I wouldn’t be able to save my money and treasures”**와 같이 일관되게 과거형과 부정문을 사용하세요.

8. 결론 문장의 표현력 강화: “look like hero”는 “are like heroes”로 바꿔 문장을 더욱 자연스럽게 만들어 보세요.