Re: 2A 208 -Jia

[Teacher2]

The title of this story is 'An Old, Old Story.' Freddy's mom w̶a̶s̶ told him how w̶a̶s̶ the report (went). He replied, Billy Redcloud's report was best of all. Freddy s̶h̶o̶n̶e̶ shined his eyes w̶i̶t̶h̶ when he told B̶i̶l̶l̶y̶'̶s̶ Billy's story. Freddy want̶ wanted to hear̶d̶ his great grandmother's story. So, his mother w̶a̶s̶ told him a story. All the animals w̶e̶r̶e̶ teased him because he had no tools. Man and W̶w̶oman were hungry. So, they w̶e̶r̶e̶ found Ku working in the shade of the trees, making tools. Ku was sorry that he made tools. And they (went) back to their village. They use̶ used weapons for hunt̶ hunting animals. The animals w̶a̶s̶ were scared (of) them. Freddy w̶a̶s̶ told (the story) in story hour, (and the) children w̶e̶r̶e̶ liked his story. This book is very fun.

Grade: B

Tips)

1. 과거시제로 통일해서 써주세요.
2. 불필요한 'was/were'를 빼주세요.
3. Man과 Woman은 대문자로 시작해요.
4. Ku가 만든 도구들이 어떤 것이었는지 설명해주세요.
5. 동물들이 왜 사람들을 놀렸는지 설명해보면 좋겠어요.
6. 이 이야기가 왜 재미있었는지 이유를 써보면 좋겠어요.