Re: Ruby & Max -강태호

[Teacher1]

Ruby and Max: Ruby’s Puppet Show

Ruby and her friend Louise decided to make a small theater and perform with puppets.

They explained to Max that the audience is the second most important part after the performers.

But Max, who didn’t like being just an audience member, interfered with a robot.

After that, he took a doll's hat and used it as a crayfish doll.

So Ruby and Louise told him not to put the doll on the chair.

After that, the play started, but Max disappeared.

Then, Max suddenly appeared next to them with a spider doll and joined the show.

Then, they heard clapping from somewhere, and it was their grandmother.

Score: B-

Tips)

• "decide" → "decided": 과거형으로 수정.
• "play with Puppet" → "perform with puppets": 더 자연스러운 표현으로 수정.
• "And he explains that Max is the second most important person..." → "They explained to Max that the audience is the second most important part after the performers.": 문장을 더 명확하고 자연스럽게 수정했어요.
• "take the doll's hat as a crayfish doll" → "he took a doll's hat and used it as a crayfish doll.": 의미를 분명히 정리했어요.
• "Then I heard clap somewhere" → "Then, they heard clapping from somewhere": "clap"은 동사이고, "clapping"이 맞는 표현이에요.

잘했어요! 문장을 조금 더 자연스럽게 다듬으면 더욱 좋은 글이 될 거예요. 😊✨