Re: max and ruby(jonghyeon)

[Teacher1]

Grandma's Berry Patch

Grandma made Max and Ruby 's pick berries.

They picked raspberries hard.

But Max didn't help and stole the raspberries.

So the basket was not full of raspberries.

And Ruby brought the raspberries Max had stole stolen.

They finished picking raspberries.

And they started to pick blueberries.

Ruby picked blueberries happily.

And Max was eating the blueberries.

So Ruby made him play with a toy.

Ruby gathered blueberries in the basket.

But Max gathered blueberries in his toy.

Ruby stopped him and moved the blueberries to the basket.

And Ruby started to pick blackberries.

Max stole the blackberries with his drone.

And he gave them to her.

And they got enough berries for their Grandma to cook her special berry recipe.

But they blended the berries.

Blended berries was were Grandma's special recipe.

WOW!

Score: B+

Tips)

• "Ruby's"는 필요 없고, 그냥 "Grandma made Max and Ruby pick berries"가 맞아요!
• "rasp berries" → "raspberries", "Black berries" → "blackberries" 한 단어로 써야 해요.
• "stole"의 과거분사는 "stolen"이에요. "had stolen"이 맞는 표현이에요.
• "basket" 앞에 "the"를 넣으면 더 자연스러워요!
• "Blended berries was"는 틀린 문법이에요. "Blended berries were"가 맞아요.
• 같은 단어가 많이 반복되니까, 다양한 표현을 써보면 더 좋아요! 😊