Re:Candy's writing : Do you think music is important to life? What is the role of music to life?

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I think music is important to our life.

The role of music to life is music makes us happy and delight.

                                            it

I love to listen to music.

When I listen to music, I feel very nice and relaxed.

Usually I listen to pop songs.

That is my favorite hobby.

I can sing pop songs well, and I can learn the English to sing pop

songs.                                  

                                                                        English

When I feel upset or moody, I listen to music.

And music makes me feel better and I enjoy the songs.

I think the music is really important to life and the music is

             music                                                          music

really needed in life.

Music gives energy to our life.

When you feel bad, just try to listen to music!

COMMENTS:

        Hello Candy. People listen to music for different reasons, just like you. Music helps people relax, mirror their emotions and brings them together. It is important to people because it brings people together.

Your writing is good but you need to note some mistakes:

• You need to use pronouns to avoid using the same word in a sentence.

  Example: The role of music to life is music makes us happy and delight.

                    (The role of music to life is it makes us happy and delight.)

• It is not always necessary to use an article in English.

  Examples:

   I can learn the English to sing pop songs.

  (I can learn English to sing pop songs.)

I think the music is really important to life and the music is

really needed in life.

(I think music is really important to life and music is

really needed in life.)

NOTE:

Here are some situations in which you don’t need to use the.

1. When you talk about things in general

You don’t need an article when you talk about things in general.

• Use plural count nouns:

“Cats make great pets!

• Use non-count nouns:

I love listening to music.

2. Names – holidays, geography, companies, languages

These are all proper nouns.

a. Holidays (Christmas, Mother’s Day., St. Patrick’s Day, Valentine’s Day)

I got a beautiful new dress for Christmas

b. Geography

 Articles are not used before countries, states, cities, towns, continents, single lakes, and single mountains.

“I live in Canada.

I’m going to Europe next month on vacation.

Lake Ontario and Lake Huron are 2 of the Great Lakes.

Mt. Fuji is the highest mountain in Japan.

Of course, there is an exception to every rule in English:

the United States, the Czech Republic, the Philippines

c. Companies

“Bill Gates founded Microsoft.

Wal-Mart is the largest employer in the U.S.

d. Universities

“Her son graduated from Harvard.

She goes to Oxford.

However, if the name of the university begins with University, then you must use the:

“He has a master’s degree from the University of Toronto.

e. Languages

“I am studying Russian.

3. Places, locations, streets

Streets, some locations, and some places do not need an article:

I usually go to church on Sundays.

NOTE: You don’t need an article for subjects you study at school: math, geography, business, history, science

Places where you DO need to use an article:

the bank, the movies, the hospital, the post office, the airport, the train station, the bus stop, the doctor, the dentist.

4. Sports

Sports and other physical activities do not need an article:

I love to go skiing in the winter.

She tries to do yoga at least 3 times a week.

5. Noun + number

(He’s staying at the Hilton hotel in room 221.)

My English class is in room 6 on the first floor.

First is an adjective in this sentence, used to describe the floor.

6. Acronyms

An acronym is an abbreviation (a short form) of a name. It uses the first letter of each word to form a new word.

a. If the acronym is pronounced as a word, don’t use the.

(NATO, UNESCO)

b.The is not used before university acronyms:

(John Smith got his MBA at UCLA.)

EXCEPTION:

 You need to use the before acronyms of organizations & countries when the letters are pronounced individually, not as a word.

“The UN was created after the Second World War.

Other acronyms that need ‘the’:

“the EU, the US, the CIA, the FBI