Re: Caillou (Ellie)

[Teacher Winget]

Today's story is called "Caillou Learns to Drive."

One day, Caillou is was playing with his toy car. And his dad is suggest go to washing dad's car His dad suggested washing his car. So Caillou and his dad are go to washing dad's car at his garden went to wash the car in the garden. His dad is sprinkle water on his car,and Caillou is in dad's car His dad sprinkled water on the car, and Caillou sat inside the car. While his dad is sprinkle was sprinkling water on his car , Caillou is imagine drive car and around are many animals imagined driving and seeing many animals around. Then, Caillou is by honking a car's horn his dad is surprised and Caillou is laughed when his dad is hit the water Caillou honked the car's horn, surprising his dad. Caillou laughed when his dad got hit by the water.

And Dad's car is look so clean and shine The car looked so clean and shiny. And Caillou's family go to a beach by the clean car Caillou's family went to the beach in the clean car.

Grade: B+

Tips:

1. Use Correct Verb Tenses: Ensure verbs are in the past tense consistently (e.g., "suggest" to "suggested," "is sprinkle" to "sprinkled").
2. Clarify Actions: Make sure actions are clear and logical (e.g., "Caillou sat inside the car" instead of "Caillou is in dad's car").
3. Combine Sentences for Clarity: Merge sentences to improve flow and readability.