hi jim^^
This is my second writing.
How was your today? Um... I spent the whole day studying at
the library and attending a lecture in the institute.
Today I went to the jin-su national university
of education.
My home is next to that university. So I went that university by
bicycle to study English and to do any other things. Even though I
have been living this city for 10 years, I really don't know about
that university. When I went there, there are few student
at that
library just like empty. I'm just studyed
English and read the
English written book titled of " A dog
of flanders." In the
evening, I went private institute to improve my speaking skills.
This is all about my today's work. Have a good night, Jim^^ |
Hhi, J jim^^
This is my second writing.
How was your day today? Um... I spent the whole
day studying at
the library and attending a lecture in the institute.
Today,
I went to the Jjin-su Nnational Uuniversity
of education.
My home is next to that university. So I went to that university
by
bicycle to study English and to do any other things. Even though I
have been living in this city for 10 years, I really
don't know much about
that university. When I went there, there wereare
only
a few students
at theat
library.
It was almost just like
empty. I'm
just studiyed
English.
I and read an the
English written book titled of , " A
Ddog
of Fflanders."
In the
evening, I went to a private institute to improve my
speaking skills.
This is all about my daytoday's work. Have
a good night, Jim^^ |
Comment: Very
good! However, try to make sentences flow. There were some
parts where a new sentence did not sound good because your topic changed
drastically. You need to make the transition smoother. Take
a good look at my corrections.
Personal comment:
Hi, there. Thank you for asking how my day went. I had a good
day, thanks. You must be a very diligent student. I am glad to
see that you are very eager to learn English. Keep it up and you
will become a native speaker in no time. ;-) |
첫댓글 I thank you heartily because of your sincere and quick correction. You gave me the greenlight to study foreign language.*^^*
I am glad to hear that you are feeling that way. Keep up the great work!