Re: Max and Ruby - Jia

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Ep.1 Surprise Ruby

Today is Ruby's birthday.

She got cake, presents, and if she was lucky, if lucky on the day, her friends would come to are coming their house.

Then, Max realized relized that today was Ruby's birthday. So, Max lured Ruby into in the kitchen to eat a mud cake.

But Ruby threw the mud cake away away mud cake in the yard.

Meanwhile, Max kept bringing continue brought Ruby's tiara to lure Ruby.

Ruby found Max, but Max hid and escaped better than fleed well than Ruby expected.

Max and Ruby jumped juamped like frogs and they arrived at Grandmother's house.

At In Grandmother's house, Ruby's birthday bithday party was held opned in there.

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Score: C+Tips)

📌 문법 포인트:

• "if lucky on the day" → "if she was lucky, her friends would come" → 문장이 자연스럽도록 다시 썼어요.
• "relized" → "realized" → 철자가 틀렸어요!
• "in the kitchen" → "into the kitchen" → "in"은 위치를 나타내고, "into"는 안으로 들어가는 동작을 나타내요.
• "continue brought" → "kept bringing" → "continue" 뒤에는 동사 원형이 와야 하지만, "kept bringing"이 더 자연스러워요.
• "fleed" → "escaped" → "flee"의 과거형은 "fled"이지만, 여기서는 "escaped"가 더 자연스러워요.
• "juamped" → "jumped" → 철자 오류!
• "like frog" → "like frogs" → "Ruby와 Max" 둘 다 개구리처럼 뛰었으니 복수형 "frogs"가 맞아요.
• "bithday" → "birthday" → 철자가 틀렸어요!
• "opned in there" → "was held" → "opned"은 틀린 표현이고, "was held"가 더 적절해요.

📌 이야기 발전:

• Max는 왜 Ruby를 부엌으로 유인했을까요? 🍰
• 루비는 왜 진짜 케이크가 아니라는 걸 알았을까요? 🎂
• 할머니 집에서 파티 장면을 더 자세히 묘사하면 더 재미있을 거예요! 🎉