Re: 김하윤

[Teacher1]

Max and Ruby went to a shoe supermarket to buy pumpkins to make jack-o'-lanterns.

Mr. Pitta, the supermarket owner, made a scarecrow using pumpkins.

Pitta Mr. Pitta explained that the scarecrow had a candy eyes and a mouth.

Max wanted to eat the candy.

But after buying pumpkins, they went to the place where the pumpkins were gathered.

Then they started picking out pumpkins.

But Max, who wanted to eat candy so badly, went to the scarecrow for the candy.

Ruby, who found it him, went to catch him, and after returning, the pumpkins that she had picked had already been bought by someone else.

As the situation repeated, the pumpkins were already gone.

Nevertheless, Max knocked the scarecrow over with a drone to eat the candy, and Ruby was able to buy the pumpkin that was the face of the scarecrow, and Max was able to eat the candy.

Score: B+

Tips)

• "shoe store"는 신발 가게예요! "supermarket"이 맞아요.
• "Pitta"보다는 "Mr. Pitta"로 쓰는 게 더 자연스러워요.
• "a candy eyes" → "candy eyes" (candy는 셀 수 없는 명사예요!)
• "found it" → "found him" (Max를 가리키는 것이므로 "him"이 맞아요.)
• 문장이 길고 반복되는 부분이 있어요. 조금 더 간결하게 쓰면 좋아요!