Today, I'm going to write about the Milly, Molly, and BushBob story.
Milly and Molly saw the smoke from BushBob's chimney. Suddenly, Molly suggested surprising BushBob. Milly and Molly followed the track along the edge of the bush to BushBob's cottage. There Milly and Molly met BushBob. BushBob had a beard the color of his sweater and a hat that never left his head. BushBob had a cow, hen, and sheep. He grew all his own vegetables and kept bees for their honey. His orchard gave him apples, pears, peaches, and plums. Milly and Molly were full of fresh bread and honey. BushBob said, "Let's sit in the sun and enjoy the birds." Milly and Molly sat with BushBob on the old bench under the apple tree. Then BushBob was quiet for a very long time. BushBob was going to move to an apartment with a bank full of money. Milly and Molly's eyes were like saucers. They all broke up now. BushBob settled into his new apartment. But there was no room for a garden or a tree with apples. Finally, after some time passed, they met again.
Grade: B
Tips):
- Consistency: Ensure consistent verb tense (e.g., "saw" instead of "see").
- Punctuation: Add necessary punctuation for clarity (e.g., commas and quotation marks).
- Articles and Prepositions: Use correct articles and prepositions (e.g., "an apartment" instead of "apartment").
- Clarity: Ensure sentences are clear and complete (e.g., "There Milly and Molly met BushBob" instead of "So Milly and Molly meet BushBob").
- Connecting Sentences: Improve sentence connections for better flow (e.g., "They all broke up now" instead of "Milly and Molly and BushBob break up now").