Re: 김가현

[Teacher1]

Ruby and Max went to the store to buy a perfect pumpkin.

In th the store, they looked around the store.

They saw the Mr. Piata's Pitta’s booky cookie scarecraw spooky cookie scarecrow.

Max wanted to the candy, but Ruby didn't allow it.

She was looking for the a pumpkin.

He Max went back to the booky cookie scarecraw spooky cookie scarecrow.

But she Ruby brought him back again.

And she missed the perfect pumpkin.

Max bring brought his toys.

He controlled it, and the booky cookie scarecraw's spooky cookie scarecrow’s head dropped.

Fortunately, Ruby got a pumpkin, and he Max got some jellys jellies that was were attached on to the pumpkin.

Score: B-

Tips)

• "th store" → "the store" (오타 수정!)
• "the Mr. Piata" → "Mr. Pitta" (고유명사 앞에는 "the"를 안 붙여요.)
• "booky cookie scarecraw" → "spooky cookie scarecrow" (올바른 단어로 수정!)
• "wanted to candy" → "wanted the candy" (want 뒤에는 목적어가 와야 해요.)
• "bring" → "brought" (과거형 사용!)
• "jellys" → "jellies" (복수형 올바르게 쓰기)
• 문장이 자연스럽도록 수정했어요. 조금 더 차분하게 문장을 연결하면 더 좋을 거예요! 😊