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Movies and TV programs have negative effects on behavior of young people. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.

 Over the past a few years, it has been generally argued about whether movies and TV programs adversely effect behavior of young people. Some people believe that violent films or TV programs make young people conduct in offensive manner; nevertheless, others might disagree with it. However, I am convinced that movies and TV programs influence youngsters positively. Actually, I have two specific reasons to strengthen my idea. I will clearly show and develop why I maintain my personal opinion as specifically as I can in the next following paragraphs: learning ethical values from educational TV programs and relieving stress.

 To begin with, young people, especially young children can learn about moral values through watching educational TV programs. If young children are taught about why they should behave in moral way and how to distinguish good and evil through books or by teachers, they will feel bored and not be willing to listen to it. On the other hand, it they watch TV programs which easily explain what kinds of demeanors are good, they will be interested in it and understand it without difficulty. Although some people might insist that there are only few educational TV programs teaching desirable behaviors to young children, it is past’s story. Nowadays, there are a number of TV programs made in the purpose of teaching young children about basic ethical values. To tell one of stories of my younger brother who is eight years old, when he first entered kindergarten, he was a little rude and liked to ignore rules. He often fought with his friends because he took away their toys. Yet, his bearings started to change as he watched children’s TV programs, Pororo. The program was usually regarding relationship among animal characters. It emphasized that it is important to be kind to friends and listen to friends’ ideas. While watching the program, my brother began to apprehend why he should be nice to his friends and the significance of sticking the rule in order to be closer to friends and his behaviors gradually changed. It he had not watched the educational TV programs for children, he could not have been able to realize why he should treat their friends kindly and would not have good relationship with his friends now.

 Moreover, young people can relieve themselves from stress while watching movies or TV programs. Even though some people might insist that there are more effective ways for people to relieve stress, I think watching films and TV are the easiest way for them to gain relief from stressful routine. Today’s students and workers have busy lives and they barely plan special activities or travel so as to relieve stress, so watching TV or movies can be the best way for them to relieve stress. Relieving stress is essential to preventing oneself from being excessively sensitive or offensive to others. In fact, KSC, Korean Statistical Center in South Korea conducted survey on students attending Seoul National university pertaining to the activities they enjoy when they want to relieve themselves from stress. Interestingly, about 80 percent of them replied that they usually see films or their favorite entertaining TV programs when they feel stressful. As the survey indicates, people can relieve stress by watching TV or movies.

 To summarize the points made in the paragraphs above, I concretely believe that movies or TV programs have positive impact on bearings of young people.

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 Over the past a few years, it has been generally argued about whether movies and TV programs adversely affect behavior of young people. Some people believe that violent films or TV programs make young people conduct in offensive manner; nevertheless, others might disagree with it. However, I am convinced that movies and TV programs influence youngsters positively. Actually, I have two specific reasons to strengthen my idea. I will clearly show and develop why I maintain my personal opinion as specifically as I can in the next following paragraphs: learning ethical values from educational TV programs and relieving stress.

 To begin with, young people, especially young children can learn about moral values through watching educational TV programs. If young children are taught about why they should behave in moral way and how to distinguish good and evil through books or by teachers, they will feel bored and not be willing to listen to it. On the other hand, it they watch TV programs which easily explain what kinds of demeanors are good, they will be interested in it and understand it without difficulty. Although some people might insist that there are only few educational TV programs teaching desirable behaviors to young children, it is no more about today. Nowadays, there are a number of TV programs made in the purpose of teaching young children about basic ethical values. To tell one of stories of my younger brother who is eight years old, when he first entered kindergarten, he was a little rude and liked to ignore rules. He often fought with his friends because he took away their toys. Yet, his bearings started to change as he watched children’s TV program, Pororo. The program was usually regarding kinship among animal characters who were friends. It emphasized that it is important to be kind to friends and listen to friends’ ideas. While watching the program, my brother began to apprehend why he should be nice to his friends and that he should stick to the rules in order to be closer to friends. Accordingly, his behaviors gradually changed. If he had not watched the educational TV programs for children, he could not have been able to realize why he should treat their friends kindly and would not have good relationship with his friends now.

 Moreover, young people can relieve themselves from stress while watching movies or TV programs. Even though some people might insist that there are more effective ways for people to relieve stress, I think watching films and TV are the easiest way for them to gain relief from stressful lives. Today’s students and young workers receive more and more stress from busy lives, but relieving stress is essential to preventing oneself from being excessively sensitive or offensive to others and having more positive attitude towards others. Yet, they are barely affordable to plan special activities or travel so as to relieve stress, so watching TV or movies can be the best way for them to relieve stress; because, they do not require a lot of money or time. In fact, KSC, Korean Statistical Center in South Korea conducted survey on students attending Seoul National university pertaining to the activities they enjoy when they want to relieve themselves from stress. Interestingly, about 80 percent of them replied that they usually see films or their favorite entertaining TV programs when they feel stressful. As the survey indicates, people can relieve stress by watching TV or movies.

 To summarize the points made in the paragraphs above, I concretely believe that movies or TV programs have positive impact on bearings of young people in that it helps young children learn fundamental moral values and enables young people to relieve stress.

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