[Corrected] I'm planning to take a trip all around the Korea next week.

[Jim Lee]

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Hi... I'm planning to take a trip. Actually I just made a decision a few hours ago. I didn't yet have a detailed plan about this journey. I think this journey will be for about one week. This trip is aimed at gaining new experience and refreshing my life. Actually I'm about to return my study next semaster. I think upcoming semaster is most important in my whole life. I have to do my best in my study. I'm considering it as a survival game. I think this trip make me more faithful and energetic in my life. Today I have too many things to do. I have some homeworks. What do you think about nursing home? This is the one of my homeworks today... I think it's okay if the opportunity to meet their family regularly is given to the senior citizen. This means that their family must go to the nursing home to meet their grandparents or their parents regularly. I have to think about this subject tonight... Anyway have a good night, Jim... See you...^^;	Hi... I'm planning to take a trip. Actually, I just made thea decision a few hours ago. I don’t didn't yet have a detailed plan about this journey yet. I think this journey will be for about one week. This trip is aimed at gaining new experience and refreshing my life. Actually, I'm about to return to my studiesy next semeaster. I think the upcoming semeaster is going to be the most important time in my whole life. I have to do my best in my studiesy. I'm considering it as a survival game. I think this trip will make me more faithful and energetic in my life. Today, I have too many things to do. I have some homeworks. What do you think about a nursing home? This is the one of my homeworks today... I think it's okay if the opportunity to meet their family regularly is given to the senior citizens. This means that their family must go to the nursing home to meet their grandparents or their parents regularly. I have to think about this subject tonight... Anyway have a good night, Jim... See you...^^;
Comment: Excellent writing!  You are a great writer.  However, to make your writing better…try making the transition of one sentence to the next smoother.  What I mean is…try to make it flow.  Otherwise, it was great. Personal comment: What do I think of old people living in nursing homes?  Well, I think it would be okay as long as both of my parents are still living…however, if one should go before the other, I can’t even imagine one of my parents spending time alone.  I think old people need love…and family.