Re: 1c 212 Lina

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This story is about Mily Milly and Molly and a little piglet. One day a pig born gave birth to babies. But the one pig had kidnapped was kidnapped. Mily Milly and Molly was were sad. Then the pig come came back to the house. Mily Milly and Molly was suppressed were surprised. Tish This story is was fun.

Score: B+

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1. suppressed -> surprised: '억압된(suppressed)'이 아니라 '놀란'이라는 뜻의 단어는 surprised예요! 그리고 Milly와 Molly 두 명이니까 were surprised라고 적어주세요!

2. was -> were: Milly and Molly는 두 명(복수)이기 때문에 was가 아니라 were를 써요! (Milly and Molly were sad)

3. come -> came / was kidnapped: 지나간 과거의 이야기이므로 come 대신 과거형 came을 쓰고, '납치되었다'라고 쓸 때는 was kidnapped라고 적어주세요!

4. 감정 표현이 멋진 글!: 슬픔(sad)과 놀라움(surprised) 같은 인물들의 기분을 아주 잘 표현해서 글이 훨씬 흥미진진해졌어요! 스펠링만 조금 더 주의하면 완벽해질 거예요!