Here's the corrected version with explanations:
The book's title is Milly and Molly go Go camping Camping
One day Milly and Molly make made a tent**. They make made a pillow and many blanket blankets.** they They rested on under the Lemmon lemon tree**,** and when night come came they decided to night camp**.** Molly's dad save watched over them**.**
they They set up a box and blanket and they played camping**.** they They feel felt excited**.** l I think this thing is fun**.**
they They get got a rest and come came back to their life**.**
Score: C+
Tips)
- Describe what the tent looked like.
- Tell us what they did while camping.
- Explain why Molly's dad watched over them.
- Add more details about how they felt during their camping adventure.
- Describe what they did when they came back to their normal life.