Re: Read it Unit7 Isabella

[Teacher Winget]

The book's title is "The Silent Music of John Cage."

After I read this book, this book is very interesting about music. I found it very interesting because it is about music.

I like play piano playing the piano, so I like this book.

Because this book about piano music and write. It is about piano music and composing.

I know about John Cage.

John Cage is wrote wrote a revolutionary piece of music titled "4'33"."

The 4' 33" is 4 minutes 33 seconds. "4'33"" lasts for 4 minutes and 33 seconds.

No playing for 4 minutes and 33 seconds. is done during that time.

I read will read this book again.

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Score: B+

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Tips):

1. 문법 및 표현 수정:

   • "this book is very interesting about music" → "I found it very interesting because it is about music" (자연스럽고 명확한 표현).
   • "I like play piano" → "I like playing the piano" (동명사 사용).
   • "this book about piano music and write" → "It is about piano music and composing" (문장 완성).
   • "John Cage is wrote" → "John Cage wrote" (시제 오류 수정).
   • "No playing for 4 minutes and 33 seconds" → "No playing is done during that time" (문법 수정).

2. 내용 추가하기:

   • 왜 John Cage의 음악이 혁신적인지 간단히 추가하면 더 흥미로울 수 있습니다.
   • 4'33"을 듣는 사람들의 반응이나 느낀 점을 쓰면 더 풍부한 내용이 될 수 있습니다.