Re: Max and Ruby- 추영은

[Teacher1]

The title of this story is "Ruby's Puppet Show."

I will summarize the Max and Ruby story.

Ruby and Louise decided to put on a puppet show called "Mary Has a Little Lamb" and prepared for the puppet show, but Max interrupted them with another toy.

They told Max he had to be an audience member, help the other audience members sit down on their chairs, and clap when the show started.

Then, the puppet show began.

They opened the curtains, but soon, they were confused because Max was gone.

Max was behind the stage with the spider puppet and joined the puppet show with Ruby and Louise.

At that time, their grandmother became the audience and clapped.

In my opinion, I don't think it was a coincidence that Grandma came to Ruby's house.

Score: A-

Tips)

• "do a puppet show" → "put on a puppet show": 공연을 할 때는 "put on"을 사용해요.
• "help other audience sit down" → "help the other audience members sit down": "audience"는 집합 명사라 "members"를 붙이는 것이 더 자연스러워요.
• "clapped" → "clap": "told Max he had to" 다음에는 동사 원형이 와야 해요.
• "was behind with the spider puppet" → "was behind the stage with the spider puppet": 위치를 더 명확하게 표현했어요.
• "did a puppet show with" → "joined the puppet show with": 더 자연스러운 표현으로 수정했어요.
• "became an audience" → "became the audience": 특정한 관객이므로 "the"를 사용했어요.

아주 잘했어요! 글의 흐름이 자연스럽고 문장이 잘 정리되어 있어요. 😊✨