Re: Caillou-Lily

[Teacher Winget]

There were funny noises around and lots of people he had never met.

"Caillou, pleased to meet you! Welcome to the office."

"Wow!"

"Here you go, your very own desk for the day. What would you like to do?"

"I want to do work."

Caillou thought that working was writing meant writing on paper.

"I can work with that!"

"I’m finished! Look, Mommy."

"Just good Caillou" → "That's good, Caillou!"

Caillou was really bored.

Caillou’s father is here. → Caillou’s father arrived.

Caillou said he had a very hard time. → Caillou said, "I had a really hard time!"

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Score: B+

Tips (수정 및 추가 내용)

1. 자연스러운 대화 형식으로 수정:

   • "Caillou pleased to meet you welcome to the office."
     → "Caillou, pleased to meet you! Welcome to the office." (문장을 자연스럽게 정리하고 쉼표 추가)
   • "Just good Caillou" → "That's good, Caillou!" (문법 수정 및 더 자연스러운 표현으로 변경)
   • "Caillou’s father is here." → "Caillou’s father arrived." (현재형 대신 과거형 사용)

2. 자연스럽고 문법적으로 맞는 표현으로 변경:

   • "Caillou thought that working was writing on paper."
     → "Caillou thought that working meant writing on paper." (‘~을 의미하다’라는 뜻에서 ‘meant’ 사용)
   • "Caillou said he had a very hard time."
     → "Caillou said, 'I had a really hard time!'" (더 자연스럽고 대화체에 맞게 수정)