[Jim's Correction] Re:Pray for the repose of the deceased

[Jim Lee]

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It was gloomy day. I’m a job seeker. Yesterday, I received the fail mail from the company which is I really wanted to enter. To get inside this company, I spent my holiday writing my resume. I have collected the newspaper related that company and field and studied that is needed to perform the task, moreover I have some experience while at university. Sometimes I drew a fine picture of my future I work something in the office, but that was a fancy merely. It’s not real. I am afraid that I remain a person without a regular occupation; furthermore, I have to refund my loaned money of university tuition fees from the end of this year, which is made me become depressed. When I leave my first job, I felt confident of success, but I regret having done occasionally.  I am unemployed and I have no money, I have a dream only, but after looking fail mail, I couldn’t get up today. I wanted to stay in the bed because my strength is gone. Although the sun rose, I didn’t stand up I wandered in darkness. Later, however, I changed my mind. I got up and I washed my face and I determined to be not a failure. My problem is toeic score but it will go up if I do my best. I saw the news about actress 정다빈's death. I felt sad as well as the number of people was sorrowful at her story; however, she is another. She was dead but I am alive. She is not exist but I am still in existence. She was history, but I will make history and I will be recognized. It’s not wise to kill oneself. Pray for the repose of the deceased.

It was gloomy day. I’m a job seeker. Yesterday, I received the faila mail letter from the company which is I really wanted to enter. It said in the letter that I did not get the job. To get inside a job at this company, I spent my holiday writing my resume. I have collected the newspaper articles related that to the company and field and studied what that is needed to perform the task, moreover I thought I would have a good chance of getting the job because I have some working experience while at while I was attending university. Sometimes  I drew a fine picture of my future of me working  I work something in the an office, but that was just a fancy merely. It’s not real. I am afraid that I will remain a person without a regular occupation; furthermore, I have to refund repay my loaned money of I got for my university tuition fees from starting from the end of this year., which This is making made me become depressed. When I leave left my first job, I felt confident of getting another job. success, but However, I regret having done so occasionally.  I am unemployed and I have no money., I have a do have a dream only, but after reading the letterlooking fail mail, I couldn’t get up today. I wanted to stay in the bed because my strength was is gone. Although the sun rose, I didn’t get stand up. I wandered in darkness. Later, however, I changed my mind. I got up and I washed my face and I was determined to be not be a failure. My problem is the toeic score but it will go up if I do my best. I saw the news about the actress, 정다빈's death. I felt sad. I also read as well as the number of people who felt sorrow was sorrowful at her story; however, she is another. She was dead but I am alive. She does is not exist but I am still in existence. She is was history, but I will make history and I will be recognized. It’s not wise to kill oneself. Pray for the repose of the deceased.Rest in peace.

[NIVEA]

ㅋ 정말 영어로 생각하는 거랑 한국말로 생각하는 거랑 좀 다른 것 같아요. ㅎㅎ 샘님 감사합니다. ^^