Re: 1C summery Isabella

[Teacher1]

The book's title is "Milly, Molly and the Pumpkin Seeds". Today was market day. Milly and Molly found an old radio, and they carried it home. So Milly and Molly turn turned on the radio and the newsreader said something. Milly and Molly go went to the Farmer Hegarty**'s farm**. Milly and Molly found Farmer Hegarty's little pumpkins pumpkin plants. And Milly and Molly have had an idea. Milly and Molly asked if they could give the birds some seeds. And Milly and Molly also asked if we they could send the pumpkin seeds to Africa. In the summer**,** Farmer Hegarty helped Milly and Molly. In the autumn**,** swallow swallows took pumpkin seeds to Africa. Over the winter**,** Famer Farmer Hegarty took the old raido radio and fix fixed it. And they turned on the radio. After I read this book, I thought Milly and Molly is have had a very good idea.

Score: B

Tips)

1. Use capital letters for proper nouns like "Seeds" in the book title.
2. Add more details about what the newsreader said on the radio.
3. Explain why Milly and Molly wanted to send seeds to Africa.
4. Describe how Farmer Hegarty helped Milly and Molly in the summer.
5. Share your thoughts about why Milly and Molly's idea was good.