In order to be successful in the future, making more person connections like having a lot of friends is better than studying hard in school. Do you agree with the statement? Use specific reasons and details in your essay.
Many people believe that getting a sucess in life needs lots of friends and studying hard. Some might agree that to succeed in life, all we need to do is making more personal connections like having a lot of friends rather than studying hard in school; nevertheless, others might believe that it is more important for success in learning literal knowledge rather than making more branch in personal connection. However, I am concretely convinced that success comes from personal relationship than studying books. In fact, I have two specific reasons to strengthen my opinion why I insist on my way. I will explain what to do as specifically as I can in the next following paragraphs: able to know practical knowledge and increasing sociality.
To begin with, expanding range of personal connection is essential for success. We can listen vivid experience knowledge through relationship with workers. Frankly speaking, we can learn many details of skills in books. However, it could be different from field's, where we actually are going to work. And there are also different between knowing much knowledge and making much money which means success. For example, Physics, which we essentially learn in technology university, is only knowledge how the machines operate. But, for success, we need to sell merchandise like the machines to consumers. How can we learn these skills? If we have many mentors who already work in the fields, we could learn selling skills or other important facts that are benefits of earning money. Even though basic knowledge of each fields is indispensable for working, but after we learn fundamental one, the things which conclude whether success or fail are practical techniques. Consequently, for success in your life, practical knowledge is much more important than literal one which is taught in school.
In addition, keeping lot of personal network cultivates your sociality. Social skills is sometimes more important than task related knowledge. It can influence your promotion speed in company. And if there are aquintances in your superiors, your promotion would be accelerated. Thus, the people who just study hard with books in school can't promote easily becase of absence of their social skills. On the other side, the people, who know expertise knowledge more little than formers, but know many people in company, can be promoted more quickly. In fact, KSC, Korea Statistical Center took a survey on 1000 people in SAMSUNG company pertaining to wheter or not they feel promotion influenced by social skills or expertise knowledge. Interestingly, 75 percent of them answered that they think sociality almost determines promotion speed rather than how much knowledge they have, while less than 25 percent of them replied that they feel difficult in promotion due to lack of their knowledge. This clearly show that making many friends are more meaningful acts to grab a success than studying all day long in school library. Therefore, now it is time for us to go outside rather than stuck in school with thick textbooks.
As shown above, making more relationship with many kinds of people is better than being in the box which is called school so as to reach the success.
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