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이 에세이 4.5입니다. 아직 토핑은 많이 올려야 하구요.. clear 라고 하셨어요.
There is a controversy about whether technogy has made the world a better place to live or
not. From my perspective, I firmly believe that technology has made the world a better place
to live. It is logical for two main reasons why I agree with technology has made the world a
better place to live in our life. One is that technology makes us live more conveniently. The
other is that it enables us to save time to work.
First, technology gives us a large number of chances to make our life more efficient. To
illustrate my point, after I bought "mp3", I felt that technology played an important role to live
my life conveniently. Before I use "mp3", I can not record anything whenever I want to record
my favorite songs and programs. However, "mp3" makes it possible for me to record whatever
I want even while I am walking.
Second, When it comes to saving our time, It is needless to say that technology plays a
significant role. For example, Let's compare types of transportation between an airplane and
a train. If we have to go other cities for business, an airplane allows us to take less time to go
there than a train. Also, I can say that using internet helps me save my time. These days, I
use internet banking system. After using internet banking, I can not help going to go the bank
for an affair which is something to pay for fee.
In conclusion, there are two important reasons why I think that thechnology has made the
world a better place to live. It is not ony because technology gives us have a variety of
chances to take less time, but also because technology enables us to do something with
convience.
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