Hello. dear diary~ . I was just about to sleep to pray God and fell in daydream.
( 안녕 나의 다이어리~ 난 방금 막 잠을 자기위해 하나님께 기도하구나서, 공상에 빠졌어.)
Isn`t if funny? Cleary, this time is very deep deep night(honestly dawn!), but I was `day`dreaming...
( 재밌지않니? 분명히 지금시간은 아주 아주 깊은 밤인데. 사실 새벽이지! 근데 난 데이드리밍을 하고있었으니..; ㅋㅋ)
anyway, Suddenly! I thought that I prefer to write diary especially using English~!!
(어쨌든, 갑자기 난 생각했어 일기를 쓰는게 좋겠다고 그것도 영어를 사용해서~)
So I want to upgrade my English ability. I have wonderful one dream among lots of my dreams.(different from above one.)
(그래서 나의 영어실력을 향상시킬꺼야. 나는 많은 꿈들 중에서 한 가지 멋진 꿈을 가지고 있어.
위에 데이드림 할때 꿈과는 다른;ㅋㅋ)
That is.. I become lovelycompetent elementary school teacher and teach lovely childrens by English fluently.!
(그건 바로 내가 유능하고 사랑스러운 초등학교 교사가 되서 귀여운 아이들에게 영어로 유창하게 수업을 하는 거야.!)
Although now I`m not good at English, I`m start to study English. _____I`m Jane that score 96 at university exam.
(지금은 비록 영어를 잘하진 않지만 난 영어공부를 시작하겠어. 이래뵈도 난 수능시험에서 96점 맞은 나라구.! ㅋㅋㅋ
____<- 이 칸에 `이래뵈도`라는 표현을 쓰고싶은데 어떻게 하나여? ㅜ_ㅜ)
Now, boring and exhausting bad cold is gradually disappear...
(이제 지루하고 지쳤던 독감도 서서히 사라지고있으니..)
So I`ll live a day more fertile, more valuable with joy~♪
(하루를 기쁨으로, 더욱 풍성하고 값지게 살아야지-! )
now.. watch points am 5:00
(이제 시계가 새벽 5시를 가리키고있네..)
Oh my eyebag..
(오 나의 다크써클..ㅜ_ㅜ
다크써클이 영어로 뭐였죠.. eyebag맞나요? 알았는데 까먹었어요ㅜ)
“Hello. dear diary~ . I was just about to sleep to pray God and fell in daydream.”
--> It has to be “to pray to God”;
you said “to sleep”, so better to match it with “and fall” instead of “fall”:
“Hello, dear diary. I was just about to sleep to pray to God and fall in daydream.”
Comment: To dream may mean either having some visions during sleep
or (during wakefulness) fondly imagining or envisioning something
that we wish to happen, or aspiring for something grander for us
to achieve sometime in the future:
“I dream [want to] to become an engineer”
To daydream is actively imagining a situation (during waking state
of course) that is more like what is termed in English “wishful thinking”:
“I am (day)dreaming I am walking on the streets of Disneyland”
But you talked about falling into sleep and everything that may happen in a
sleep is dream, and never daydream which we only consciously do during
waking state:
“I was just about to sleep and pray to God and fall in a dream”
“Isn`t if funny? Cleary, this time is very deep deep night(honestly dawn!), but I was `day`dreaming...”
--> Saying “this time is” and continue on with “I was” is forgivable, but matching
“this is” with “I am” is better (both in past tense):
“…this time is very deep deep night (honestly, dawn!), but I am daydreaming...”
or
“…this hour of the night is really late (honestly, dawn!), but I am still daydreaming...”
or
“…and I am still caught in a daydream...”
or
“…and I am still absorbed in my reverie”
“anyway, Suddenly! I thought that I prefer to write diary especially using English~!! “
--> We always should capitalize the first letter of every sentence:
“Anyway, suddenly I thought that I prefer to write a diary especially using English~!! “
or
“Anyway, suddenly I thought about writing a diary especially making use of English~!! “
or
“Anyway, suddenly it occurred to me to write a diary … “
or
“Anyway, it suddenly struck me to write a diary…“
or
“Anyway, suddenly I am inspired to write a diary … “
“So I want to upgrade my English ability. I have wonderful one dream among lots of
my dreams.(different from above one.)”
--> “wonderful one dream” is better said “one wonderful dream”;
to upgrade one’s skills is okay. You may also say:
“So I want to improve my English ability. I have one wonderful dream
among my other dreams (a special one among the rest)”
or
“So I want to refine my English skills. I have a wonderful dream among
many other dreams of mine (one that stands out from the rest)”
“That is.. I become lovelycompetent elementary school teacher and
teach lovely childrens by English fluently.! “
--> “children” is already plural (of “child”):
“That is, for I to become a lovely and competent elementary school teacher
and teach lovely children English fluently.! “
or
“That is, to become a lovely and skilled elementary school teacher and
teach English to lovely children”
“Although now I`m not good at English, I`m start to study English. _____I`m Jane that score 96 at university exam.”
--> “Although now I`m not good at English, I’m to start studying English. _____I`m Jane that scored 96 at university exam.”
or
“Although presently I’m not good in English, I will start studying English. _____I`m Jane who scored 96 at university exam.”
“So I`ll live a day more fertile, more valuable with joy~♪ “
--> The preceding sentence is not really bad. Alternatively we may also say it:
“So I’ll live my day more productive, more valuable with joy~♪ “
or
“So I’ll make my day more fruitful, more worthwhile and joyful~♪ “
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“now.. watch points am 5:00”
“now.. the clock points 5:00 AM”
or
“now the watch says 5:00 A.M.”
or
“now the watch reads 5:00 AM”
or
“now the time is 5:00 AM”
or
“now the clock tells the hour 5:00 AM”
첫댓글 Thank you sooooo much~:D